On Equality

On Equality
      In the days when a woman's entire obligation was to be a good daughter, a good wife and a good mother, men and women were far from equal. Women suffered sexual discrimination until the so-called feminism came into being. Nowadays, feminism has been running for over a century. Result? It ran into the extreme of "equality" from my perspective.
      Most of us agree that men and women should enjoy equality in this modern society.  But what on earth does this equality mean? To be "equal", those for feminism would like to share rything with men  they split bills, apply for masculine jobs,etc. They intended to buy in all the advantages and disadvantages of being a man. On their long journey to the "equal world",they've forgotten some basic facts  they ARE women.  Even school children know that women, after all, are different from men both physically and mentally. It is unwise, or n stupid,to ignore all these differences and pursue a so called "equal world". We couldn't expect a man to give birth to a baby as we couldn't expect the sun to rise in the west.  Likewise,  we couldn't expect a woman to become the world's fastest runner,as is , but seems forgotten by those feminists.
     Equality is not bisecting rything. Real equality should be built upon the common sense of the basic sexual differences.Since some of the jobs can only be done well enough by men,women should not feel discriminated when we fail. After all,there're also some jobs, which can only be perfectly done with women's hands. These are not symbols of inequality, but natural laws.  What really counts is equality in rights, reputation,etc. Only when all the individuals value the spirit of being equal can women really enjoy equality with men.

简  评
    男女平等是人们的美好夙愿，但什么才是真正的平等?怎样促成平等的实现?一些女权主义者们所倡导的能带来真正意义的平等吗?这是文章要告诉我们的。
    文章观点比较独特，向进行了一个多世纪的女权运动提出了质疑。开篇亮出了观点，明确表态。“Nowadays，feminism has been running for over a century．Result?It ran into the extreme of‘equality' from my perspective．”在第二段写到女权运动在现今社会的产物，进一步指出，“It is unwise，or n stupid，to ignore a11  these  differences  and  pursue  a  so-called  ‘equal world~”，并且附加了两个简洁有力的事实例证，加强这一论述观点。到此为止，文章的论述都是有条有理的，但文章接下来就急于结尾了，而对于什么是真正的平等，和如何促成平等的实现，几乎是一语带过，只写到，“What really counts is equality in rights，reputation，etc．”没有展开任何的论述，感觉是指出了问题，却没找到真正的方向，最后一段的论述空洞，没有说服力，让人觉得虎头蛇尾，实在可惜。
    文章中的关联词使用得不多，从语言表述方面也还不够成熟。英语语言是一种“chain laneuaee”，而准确、恰当的关联词是语言学习是否步入一个成熟阶段的衡量指数，这也是该习作要注意提高的地方。
    (点评教师：卢爱华)