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Have yo heard of the dying college students who badly need systematic medical treatment but lack money Ⅱ When people talk about donating to them, debate occurs. Some people say donating to those dying students is nothing different from lasting their agony(痛苦 a and wasting moneyg But I would sayC Why not Ⅱ
Here are my reasonsg First of allmthe value of these students' ture life can be realized only when they are living. Another point is that although the sum of one person's donation(捐款，捐赠) may be small, sums of donations could work wonder when collected together. Most importantly, these students in agony need our ing hands, not only financially but also spiritually. To some extent, our donation means our love, care and encouragement.
Accordingly, we should donate for those dying students as long as there is hope. The magnificence of the human civilization lies in paying respect to life. Today our pocket money may save tomorrow's promising talents. Remember, in a humanitarian(人道主义的) sense, life is the most precious property on this wonderl planet.
核心剖析 全文主题明确，脉络清晰。作者紧扣主题、语不离宗，文章各段内容均衡，并注意到人称、文体的一致，体现了整体性。文章第一段在段尾采用了问句，既与标题问句呼应，又承接前句观点，同时导出下段。第二段用“First of all”等过渡词使阐述条理清晰。第二段“Accordingly”承先启后，表达干净利落。这样处理使段落前后呼应，语义连贯流畅，内容浑然一体。读者能立刻抓住文章的脉络，没有杂乱无章的感觉。把握好整体与连贯，是本文作者组句成段、组段成篇的成功关键。
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